Bhaav - Shabdon se pare

Jin bhavo ko tumne
Apni panktiyon mein kaha hai,
Un bhavo ko maine
kayi baar jiya hai !

who lamha jo tum ne jiya hai,
un khushi ke palon ko
dil mein kayam maine kiya hai !

tumhare sawalon mein dam hai
magar shayad meri soch pe
bharosa tumhein kam hai!

Jati hun jahan pati hun wahan
Wahi khushi wahi waadiyaan.
Dil jhoomta hai jis mein
Tanha ho kar bhi sab se,
Un waadiyon ke beech
Mit jaati hain tanhaiyaan!

Us hariyaali ke beech
Paton par padi os mein
Bas hoti hai arzoo ki lapetoon
Poora aakaash apne aagosh mein.

Ik took dekhti hun
Kabhi kshitij ke pare tak ki waadiyan
Kabhi ho jati hun madhosh dekh kar
Na khattam hone wala raat ka wo aasmaan

Kahin lagta hai choo kar aaoon
Oonche oothte wo pahad,
Kabhi lagta hai jaaoon
Us bhavya saagar ke paar.

Kabhi udti hun badlon mein
To machalta hai mann
Kabhi sunti hun koi kilkari
To khil utha hain mann.

Kabhi koi kaato (squirrel)
Mujhe hansati hai
Nanhe pairon se daba kar
Jab mungfali wo khati hai

Kisi koyal ka kookna
Kisi bache ka chehkna
Kisi kabootar ki gutar goon
Kaise sab main yahan kahoon

Milta hai jo sakoon
In ehsason ko jee kar
Hota hai wohi jo milta hai
Kisi bache ko man chahi cheez pa kar

Chehre ki raunak vyakhyaan se pare hoti hai
Jo dekhti hai aankhein ya samajhta hai dil
Aisi sundarta to sach mein 'shabdon se pare' hoti hai.

Comments

Caladrius said…
iski main kya tareef kar sakta hoon, it really reflects your excellent observations, and your passion for travelling and exploration. baithe baithe har tarah ki jagaah ghoom li, lag raha hai world tour ho gaya. and one thing thats really amazing is how you always get the rhyme in congruence with the feeling. how. wow.
Winged Fantasy said…
Kya baat hai... Very nice :-)

Aks ke aayine mein
jee uttha saara jahaan...
bheeni bheeni si khushbuyen,
mehka mehka sa samaan...

Soch rahi hoon kise sarahoon? Prakriti ki sundar rachnaon ko ya phir us kavi ki kalpana ko jisne prakriti mein samayi is dabi hui si, sehmi hui si, chhupi hui sundarta ko shabdon mein pirokar ek uphaar bana diya hai. :-)
david santos said…
Hello, Aks!
This poem is fantastic. Thank you
have nice week
Aks said…
@ Sushant

Thank you ! This poem is my effort of jotting down thought which live with me in my experiences / travel / exploration. You got it quite right. You actually understood my perspective.

@ Minakshi
shukriya, shukriya !
tareef ke kabil to kabil-e-tareef mere dost hain jo meri har chhoti si baat ko sar aankhon se lagate hain.

yakinan prakriti ko sarahna uttam hoga kyon ki mujh mein ye bhav, ye shabd wahin se to aaye hain.

jo ye jahan itna sundar no hata
to koi kavi shabdon se kaise ise sarahta?
kyon koi meri panktiyon ko padhta,
kaise koi aur kavi meri kalpana samajh pata.
ye kalpana nahi sachayi hai,
jo kudrat ke zarre zarre mein samayi hai.
kaise samjhun main ise apni badai,
aakhir jo maine samjha,
wo samajh bhi to is prakriti se payi hai.

:-) Keep Smiling !

@ David
Thanks for the compliment David! Wish you the same.

:-)
Nuts said…
ok, 2 things- its good.. But I was lost reading it... Its too much of all and too little of everything..In the middle its great.... starting and ending are a bit disconnected....few tough words not going with the flow...Not ur usual type...what happened? i felt its a mix...rhyming is great as usual...but there is a 'but' for this one...don't know how to explain...bahut divided mood mein likhi hai kya?
Aks said…
Well said Nuts !
There is a part or reference that this poem makes which was concealed. The idea was to answer the questions that I received in the poem from my friend. He recently travelled to Srinagar and described the beauty in his words but countered that whatever he had seen was inexplicable, He opined that his feelings at the moment when he witnessed the nature's beauty could not be captured in words and if it could be done then the feeling / emotions of that particular moment would always be missing. I wrote in an attempt to put my thoughts of such moments in these lines.
You are absolutely right in saying that there is a disconnect because as I went on writting I kept understanding that it was becoming more and more difficult to capture it all. There was so much of it and I had so less to describe... I was running out of words. I gave up after a while, honestly........

Thanks for the inputs dearie! You know they are always valued so much :-)
Unknown said…
Good hindi words nice poemssssssssss u seee less in Hindi
Aks said…
Thanks for stopping by !
Glad you liked the words in hindi but did not quite understand the meaning of last few words...
Winged Fantasy said…
Kahan hain aap in dinon mohtarma. bada sannata chaya hai idhar... kuch kahaiye... khamoshi ka aalam todiye... :-)
Puneet said…
Jaisa ki Sushant ne kaha ki apni in pankatiyon se aapne saara jahan is blogosphere main main bimbit kar diya...Aks the reflection..too good ....
Amandeep Singh said…
Wah jaanaaab...kya baat hain..
nice observations out of nature..n the way u ve brought them up in words and rhymings!

maan gaye ustad!
Caladrius said…
post likhne ke liye mahoorat kis din ka nikla hai ?
Winged Fantasy said…
Finally you are back? Do u have a gmail or yahoo id? perhaps we could chat up a while and share our delhi experiences... :-)
Aks said…
@Minakshi
main aas paas hi hun, zara nazar ghuma kar dekho :)
somehow not in mood of writting or may be the words are just not coming from heart.
@Puneet
Thanks so much !
@Standbymind
Just another effort of putting my thoughts in words. Thanks again !
Aks said…
@Sushant
post likhne ke liye mahurat to har roz ka nikalta hai magar zehen se shabad nai umadate...so jus waiting
@Minakshi
Sure Minakshi, we can talk on google talk. The fact is I visited Coorg 2 weeks back which implies that I was again in Bangaluru :)

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